Why doesn't my monologue land with the other character?
#1
Celebrity interviews can give us such insight into their lives and personalities. Some interviews are really carefully managed while others feel surprisingly authentic. Which celebrity interviews have you found most revealing or interesting recently? I always enjoy when celebrities share something genuine rather than just giving the usual PR answers.
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#2
I’ve been trying to write a scene where my protagonist has to deliver a crucial monologue, but every draft feels like they’re just lecturing the empty air. How do you make a speech feel like it’s actually landing with another character in the room, and not just the reader?
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#3
I tried writing the scene with the other person in frame, not offstage. When I watched their breathing slow, or a blink at a line, the speech started landing. A small shoulder dip, a longer pause before replying.
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#4
One concrete thing I did was give the listener a constraint—a past grievance or deadline—and the monologue had to bend to that. The words got sharper because someone was listening with a real obligation, not curiosity.
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#5
Sometimes the landing happens when you anchor the listener to a concrete detail the speaker names, like a name, a date, or a shared memory. If they can latch onto that, the room tightens.
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#6
Maybe the problem isn't the speech at all, but the audience. I wrote a version where the room felt almost empty, then added a real person who challenges the premise midscene. It made the moment feel messy but honest.
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#7
Another quick tweak was to strip obvious reader cues and let subtext carry it. The other character doesn't say I understand, just watches the posture shift, a sudden glance, the line cut short.
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#8
Do you ever wonder if the issue is the setting or the other character's attention span more than the speech itself?
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